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"Plain English is clear, straightforward expression, using
only as many words as are necessary. It is language that avoids
obscurity, inflated vocabulary and convoluted sentence construction.
It is not baby talk, nor is it a simplified version of the English
language. Writers of plain English let their audience concentrate
on the message instead of being distracted by complicated language.
They make sure that their audience understands the message easily."
Professor
Robert Eagleson
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Plain
English is Clear English |
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The
main goal in writing is to put your message across clearly and concisely.
Readers want an effortless, readable and clear writing style. Plain
English is clear English it is simple and direct but not
simplistic.
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Write
and Edit like a Professional |
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Newspapers
such as the Financial Times or the Washington Post;
magazines such as The Economist, Time and Newsweek;
and best-selling books use the straightforward, plain English style.
Why? Because professional writers and editors know a clear style
helps their readers understand and absorb the information presented.
Around 90 percent of the newspaper subeditors time spent improving
an article for publication is cutting, simplifying and rearranging
the words into a clearer style. Heres a typical subeditors
redraft of a press release. The subeditor is breaking the poor writing
habits of the author, to produce a better and stronger writing style.
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Original Press Release
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Sub-editors
Redraft
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A
leading industry expert, Mr Bob Jones, head of the Small Business
Bureau, claimed today the Governments proposal to introduce
minimum working week legislation will require wider public
consultation to be undertaken. If the government follows this
advice, interested parties will be given an opportunity to
understand and raise their concerns prior to the legislation
being enacted by Parliament. Industry, trade bodies
and unions need to study the draft bill before the Government
introduces this new law, said Mr Jones.
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Mr
Bob Jones, head of the Small Business Bureau, said of the
Governments 35-hour working week proposal: Industry,
trade bodies and unions need to study the draft bill before
the Government introduces this new law.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words: 80
Style
Index: 75
(Poor) |
Words: 35
(56% shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent)
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Style
Index Explained
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Plain
English Checklist |
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Plain
English editing and a professional subeditors skills are similar.
Both use commonsense rules to guide them to produce a more concise,
clearer style. The 10 most important editing principles are:
1. Think
of your readers needs.
2. Organize your content well.
3. Write in a natural style as if you were talking
to the reader.
4. Keep sentences short.
5. Use active verbs.
6. Be specific rather than general.
7. Cut all redundant words and phrases.
8. Use simpler words rather than complex words.
9. Cut down on jargon.
10. Edit vigorously.
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Good
Writing Comes from Strong Editing |
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The
secret to becoming a better writer is to use these principles to
edit your draft. Here is a typical business memo. Good editing,
using these principles cuts its length by more than half and results
in a clearer style.
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Business Style
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Plain
English Redraft
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The
Staff Booking Database
The
main purpose of the Staff Booking Database (SBD) is for the
recording of staff booking requests which in turn provides
the total recurring audit cost for each client.
As
a result of the recent merger that has taken place and hence
the increase in the numbers of staff and clients, it is important
that each business unit (BU) be used in such a way as to track
and collate all staff movements. The use of the SBD allows
managers in each BU to rethink on an annual basis, the way
the audit was performed and make any necessary amendments
to the amount of staff and the mix of skills required for
the following year.
Implementing
a formal process and system will not only make sure that all
staff are receiving the right type of experience and exposure
as they progress, but it should also be of assistance in guaranteeing
our clients are receiving the most suitable mix of staff.
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The
Staff Booking Database
This
Database records staff booking requests to calculate the audit
costs for each client.
Because
the merger increased our staff and client numbers, each business
unit can now use the Staff Booking Database to track and collate
staff movements. The Database allows managers to rethink how
they perform the audit each year and change the staff and
skills needed the following year.
This
yearly review makes sure staff have the right work experience
and our clients receive the best staff to carry out each audit.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words: 164
Style
Index: 106
(Dreadful) |
Words:
89 (59% shorter)
Style Index: 11 (Excellent) |
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Only
one out of 50 business and government documents is in plain English.
Why? Because untrained writers draft documents full of passive verbs,
long sentences, wordy phrases, complex words and other style faults.
The
main problem in all writing is not a grammatical slip or an occasional
typing error. We all have poor writing habits we pick up from reading
hundreds of memos, business letters and reports that come across
our desk. For every genuine grammar mistake corrected, good subeditors
will make dozens of style changes. Do you recognise the typical
business style?
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Government
Style
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Plain
English Redraft
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As
the applicant, it is a requirement that you provide a mailing
address and an identification number when an application is
made for a hardship grant.
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You
need to send a mailing address and an identification number
when you apply for a hardship grant.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words:
26
Style
Index: 76
(Poor) |
Words:
18 (30 % Shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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Business
Letter Style
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Plain
English Redraft
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I
trust this clarifies the matter for you and look forward to
hearing from you in due course in respect of your decision
whether or not you intend to take out a loan.
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Please
let me know if you want to take out a loan.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words:
34
Style
Index: 121
(Bad) |
Words:
12 (65% Shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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Report
Style
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Plain
English Redraft
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A
questionnaire was circulated to the project team that were
based internally. Of the ten people who were sent the questionnaire
only 5 replied which is somewhat disappointing. Of those replying
virtually all were aware of the history of the pilot advertising
campaign and generally speaking meeting the aims and objectives
of the company. The strategy was viewed to be satisfactory
to meet the campaigns aims although there was some concern
expressed over the limited budget available. All respondents
at a managerial level were positive that the campaign did
meet the requirements of the company to increase its market
share.
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A
disappointing five out of ten managers replied to the internal
project teams questionnaire. Of those replying:
four knew of the pilots aims,
everyone thought the strategy was satisfactory,
two thought the budget was too small.
All
managers were sure the campaign met the companys need
to increase its market share.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words:
95
(Poor)
Style
Index: 100 |
Words:
51 (50% shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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How
StyleWriter Helps |
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StyleWriter
helps you write in plain English by identifying words and phrases
in your writing that detract from clarity. It questions your use
of long sentences and passive verbs and aims to make you think about
every word you write.
StyleWriter does not encourage a standard style that everyone
should follow. Rather, by helping you break out of the typical business
writing style, StyleWriter encourages you to express yourself in
your own words.
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The
Benefits of Plain English |
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What
are the savings in using plain English? |
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote in plain English?
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain English? |
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail? |
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Why
does plain English software guarantee success? |
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What
are the savings in using plain English?
National
governments, councils, multinational corporations, major industry
bodies and so on have adopted the plain English model for sound,
commercial reasons plain English saves time and money. The
savings claimed for plain English are remarkable:
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The US Navy estimated plain English could save it between $250$300
million every year.
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General Electric saved $275,000 by redrafting manuals into plain
English.
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The US Department of Veterans Affairs saved $40,000 redrafting
one standard letter into plain English.
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Customers in three surveys of standard letters from banks unanimously
preferred the plain English versions.
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British Telecom cut customer queries by 25 percent by using plain
English.
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The Royal Mail saved £500,000 in nine months by redesigning one
form in plain English.
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UK businesses lose £6 billion a year because of badly written
letters.
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A UK Government Plain English initiative saved £9 million in printing
costs.
These
savings come from organizations training key staff, employing professional
writers and editors. But these people, can only edit a few of the
thousands of documents produced every day in large organizations.
Imagine the savings if you used training and editing software to
guarantee everyone used plain English in every document.
Source:
Joe Kimble Writing for Dollars
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote in plain English?
Unfortunately,
the costs of poor communication do not appear in the balance sheet.
If they did, you would do something to control them. In the following
examples, the biggest cost is staff time (authors time plus
the readers time), multiplied by the number of employees who
receive the document.
1. The
United Kingdoms National Audit Office estimated the cost of
producing one page in government departments varied between £3.50
($5) to over £100 ($160).
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The low figure was for a one-page letter, typed, printed and sent
to 200 people resulting in a bill £700 ($1,120).
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The higher figure was for each page of a short report that goes
through several authors and drafts, before a senior manager presented
it to the management committee. This means the cost of such a
50-page report read by 15 senior managers was £5,000 ($8,000).
2. A
government department sent a two-page memo to 15,000 employees that
took an average of 10 minutes to read and process. The real cost
to the department was $100,000 in salaries, overheads and associated
costs. The memo was about keeping staff kitchens clean! Was it really
a $100,000 problem?
3. A
bank had a sales letter rewritten by a professional, plain English
editor. The clearer, redraft brought in an extra $11 million of
new business. No conventional accounting method would record the
previous $11 million missed business opportunity.
4. One
council sent 1.3 million pages of committee reports to councillors
in one year. If councillors worked a sixteen-hour day, seven-day
week, reading a page every minute, they would eventually get through
all the documents after 3.7 years.
Try
a simple calculation
Work
out the number of sheets of paper, e-mails and faxes in your organization
produces in one working day. Estimate the cost of each of these
documents at $10 a page. Now calculate by the number of people who
have to read them and add $1 for each person reading each document.
(To give you an idea of this figure, a typical office worker receives
over 100 messages a day). That will give you rough idea of the cost
of your paperwork for each day. Then multiply the figure by 240
to find out a realistic cost of paperwork in your organization every
year.
Plain
English will cut this bill by 30 percent.
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain English?
Today,
governments, major corporations, trade associations and professional
bodies across the world have adopted plain language as the style
for writing all documents.
For example, in the USA, presidents Eisenhower, Ford, Carter and
Clinton have all issued directives for federal employees to write
in plain language. In July 1998, President Clinton stated: The
Federal Governments writing must be in plain language. By
using plain language, we send a clear message about what the Government
is doing, what it requires, and what services it offers. Plain language
saves the Government and the private sector time, effort, and money.
Writing
in plain language could cut the Federal Governments paperwork
by one-third, save billions of dollars and make everyones
life whether working for the government or in the private
sector much simpler and easier. Ordinary Americans should
be able to understand what their Government says to them without
having to study the text closely or to consult an expert.
The
Federal Government has worked hard to introduce clearer written
communications. Many government bodies such as Education, Transportation,
Internal Revenue Service, Securities Exchange Commission, and Veterans
Affairs have run plain-language initiatives. For two years, the
Vice-Presidents office coordinated this work and encouraged
all Federal employees to adopt a clearer writing style. But today,
perhaps only one in fifty Federal employees uses a plain language
style.
US
Government runs plain English software pilot
The
US Federal Government is now running a trial of Editor Softwares
StyleWriter and Electronic Writing Course. The Environmental
Protection Agency is using both programs to train staff in plain
English editing skills and to evaluate the software for use throughout
in other department and agencies.
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail?
Most
organizations recognize customer letters, brochures, e-mails, management
reports should be clear and concise but most documents fail any
basic, plain English test.
The
traditional response has been to put employees on business writing
courses and expect one days tuition to transform the way they
think and write. In tests, people going on traditional business
writing courses often showed little improvement in writing style.
Statistics on writing style show there is typically only a 10 percent
improvement one week after the course and a month later most participants
fell back to their pre-course standard.
There
are many reasons for this failure. Here are the important ones.
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The culture of business and government
encourages poor writing. Most peoples writing
style comes from the documents they see around them. So unless
you train everyone in effective writing, improving writing standards
is difficult.
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Most people think they do write clearly,
although at least 80 percent of documents in organizations are
badly written and full of poor style faults. It always
comes as a shock when people see how much clearer documents can
become with strong editing.
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Managers believe the problem is never
with their writing style, but with the style of their staff.
Managers happily send their staff to writing courses. But after
the course, the managers continue to redraft the new, clearer
style back into management-speak. The unspoken message to the
person trying to write clearly is: Dont write clearly,
write as I do.
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writers are so close to their jargon and style they cannot see
their writing faults. Most writers have no idea why
others find their documents difficult to read and understand.
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people falsely believe the long-winded, complex style of business
and government is the expected and agreed style. Many
employees look at existing documents and copy the style. This
means people who normally speak clearly and write well, quickly
pick up the bad writing habits and stilted style of their colleagues.
- Many
people learned to write at university and college where length
and an impressive vocabulary seemed to be a virtue.
Yet in the workplace, everyone wants short and clear documents
to make their lives easier.
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Only one person in 50 attends training in effective writing.
Organizing and running courses is time-consuming and expensive.
If you use outside consultants to run them, they can cost up to
$1,500 for ten people. Plain language software is much more economical.
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Theres no backup to put any effective writing training
into practice.
Most people only remember one-third of the training ideas and
put even fewer into practice. Plain English editing software means
writers constantly learn ways to improve their style.
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Why
does plain English software guarantee success?
To
guarantee everyone in an organization writes clearly, you need to
change the communication culture, train staff and give them the
tools to back up the training. This has proved impossible without
software.
In
the same way running a spelling checker on your word processor guarantees
everyone writes without typing and spelling mistakes, plain English
software can guarantee the benefits of clear writing. Organizations
can immediately train all staff using our Electronic Writing
Course. Each employee can then run StyleWriter through
letters, memos and reports until drafting in plain English becomes
the standard throughout the organization. Organizations can also
work with us to create an Electronic House Style to make
sure every document keeps to your house-style rules and conventions.
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